Name: mystic G
Plot Rating:  10
Reason For Plot Rating:  well, it hasn't really developed yet, so how can it be bad?
Character Rating:  10
Reason For Character Rating:  well, i don't really know koola, so i'll just trust that that's what he's like.
Literary Devices Rating:  10
Reason For Literary Devices Rating:  i just really liked the last sentence. does that mean he's going to take a shower or go kill something? the world may never know... : Þ
Spelling & Grammar Rating:  10
Reason For Spelling & Grammar Rating:  no glaring misspelling or anything...good show!
Construction Rating:  09
Reason For Construction Rating:  it was a little abstract. which is not bad, i like abstract ^.^ you've got the emotions down very well
Whole Rating:  10
Reason For Whole Rating:  no reason to mark it down
Comments:  Good so far. I trust the next part will be out soonly ^.^

Reviewer: [Anonymous]
Plot Rating:  08
Character Rating:  07
Literary Devices Rating:  06
Spelling & Grammar Rating:  10
Construction Rating:  09
Whole Rating:  08
Comments:  Sounds like it could be good. hope you write a bit more soon.

Reviewer: [Anonymous]
Plot Rating:  10
Reason For Plot Rating:  Though I haven't seen the story develope yet, as it is the first chapter, I believe you have the potential to turn this into something great- afterall, a good start is a good, solid foundation. And the plot is also unique from what I have read so far. ^_^
Character Rating:  10
Reason For Character Rating:  Great. The whole chain of thoughts in this story was excellent, and the conculusion the character came to was also nice.
Literary Devices Rating:  10
Reason For Literary Devices Rating:  Excellent. Absolutely excellent. Great prose; wonderful, advanced, effective writing skills makes the story a pleasure to read. Nice use of language.
Spelling & Grammar Rating:  10
Reason For Spelling & Grammar Rating:  Your style is so wonderful and complicated, and the grammar, too, is flawless to my eye.
Construction Rating:  09
Reason For Construction Rating:  Neat, clear and easy to read. However, a little too short for my liking. ^.^
Whole Rating:  10
Reason For Whole Rating:  Well, I'm sure you can go back and read it for yourself. Then you'll see my reason for this rating.
Comments:  Please update soon. I will be looking forward to more.

Name: Hyperbole
Comments:  This is a great look into Koola's motives, I like it!
I would love to see more!

Name: Kaz Valkyrie
Comments:  That was an excellent introduction! I loved the fluidity of everything and how you described what was supposed to be described with a certain touch.
I'd love to read more! Please update soon! I'll be waiting! ^-^

Name: SSJPan
Comments:  good story so far. hope u write more soon

Name: jacob
Comments:  Well I was just logging in and taking a look around when I saw your name on my favorites list and I thought to my self- "Self, you never reviewed Mike's fic that you promised to." So here I am.
An interesting premise to be sure. I like the way you portrayed Koola here, the entire introduction reeked of a peculiar sort of sohpistication that could only come from someone like him, not incredibly evil and sadistic, more just regular evil. It's really hard for me to put into words, I'm not very gifted with them like you but I hope you understand anyway. I did enjoy the mental image of Koola shaking Goku's hand and giving him a "swath of the cosmos" to rule over. Because it then led to the mental image of Vegeta watching Goku not only become a ruler of an empire but he got to see the brother of his most hated enemy shake Goku's hand- well it was just a funny mental image.
It has been a while since you updated, let me use my massive psychic powers to divine the cause- *OOOHHHMMMMMMMM* Ah, and the answer is- School and stuff. Am I right? Of course I am. After all, that's why I never have time to write anymore... Well I hope to see something from you in the near future, and if I may I reccomend reading something by a relatively new author, Cka3ka. Her id number is 122450 and she does write entertaing stories. Well until next time...

Name: Jade Tatsu
Comments:  Heheheheheh! I like it! It's cute! But then I have always had a warped sense of humor. You have Koola down so right and I look forward to further chapters.

Name: mystic G
Rating:  10
Comments:  very...verbose. which is not bad, it just means i have to read slow ^.^ you have some very cool phrases in there...i like that one about the damp paper cage, and the one about wardrums being beating hearts...i just mangled it to pieces though...anyway, I have to admit that, like Koola's empire, i seem to be looking forward to the torment... ^.^ we've been through this, it's not perverse, it's love! so long!

Name: Jewels
Comments:  o_0
just reading that made me wonder if it was a good idea to put down for three unit english as a subject next school yr...please tell me you used a thesaurus at LEAST once while writing this!!!
on a different note it'll be interesting to see where this fic goes...
keep writing! ~_^

Name: [Anonymous]
Rating:  10
Comments:  I loved it. It was hard, however, to follow these complicated thoughts. I mean, why don't you simplify this. This is all good writing; unfortunately some people like me don't understand TOO good writing. I'm dying for this story because I think it will turn into something wonderful if you complete it...I would just like to understand it a little bit more.

Name: AbbieCat14
Rating:  10
Comments:  It was a bit confusing, but really,really good! Please hurry up and write the rest of the story! Please,Please,Please hurry up and write it! Im so anxious( Sorry for bad spelling)! thanks! Can;t wait for your next update!(again sorry for bad spelling1)